Beneath The Night

I see perfection behind half lidded eyes

dark and unforgiving, but there all the same.

I see strange clouds dancing across the skies,

Silently, I wonder if it's all a game.

I see shadows lingering in the light

I see wonder, I see fear, beneath the night.

I watch while darkness dances and cold thoughts play

I sleep for the remainder of the day.

While fears talk silently and play their part

I feel their fingers ripping at my heart.

And in the memories I wish to conceal

I feel everything I never wanted to feel.

Author's Note

Umm....I...Don't...Know? XD
I don't know what brought this on, another one of those poems that "wrote itself". Well, tell me what you think, I'm off to work on a new story. ^_^

Reviews

[Voice11]

Very deep and dark which is your specially. You did really well with the rhyming.

[MagiCrystal]

I will tell you...now!
The Night was created by God.. nothing is dark because The Moon and the dark are a blessing... to us.. and the World.. Love it

[Bud]

You should know...it's your Talent that is bringing out such Fantastic poetry! Whatever the reason is, it's yours alone. That being said, this is Excellent! Outstanding! Your Talent is growing and shaping into a most wonderful one! You've clearly tapped into the emotional bucket of wealth! Keep up the Astonishingly Beautiful works of art, and let your Talent be heard!

[Jennifer Marie Theresa ..]

This is true poetry, the type of poetry that speaks to you and grabs your soul. Beautifully imagery and images are given making you feel as if you are the narrator. Amazing work =]

[Arthur Crow]

So many of the lines here captivate me, thanks to your amazing word play, you create a mood that pulled me in.. I just wish the piece had been longer.

[Lexi Nicole]

Ohh, very interesting. I really like the rhyming in this one. My favorite stanza was the second. Really nice work!

-Howl

[Lizanne]

A wonderful poetic writing of the emotions we hide and surpress in the darkness. Ever so often they rise and tug at our mind. Maybe they are wishing to be acknowledged and worked out so they can be released to the life reviving light. Beautiful in its darkness. Love your poetic pen.

[Georgia Gypsy]

This feels like those ugly/hurtful feelings that have been repressed to keep you sane have come bubbling back to the surface...which means you could be ready to examine them and deal with them now. or at least write poetry about it...either way the poem is great! and it has loads of emotion and feeling
Another masterpiece!
Love it Aveira!

[vandana]

The poem is about darkness, lingering shadows & unspoken fears of the mind which i found was an interesting combination as it indicates the fearful thoughts & emotions within.