Teardrop Memories

Push my soles to the ground

drowning them in puddles

particles traveling into the cracks and crevices and callouses of my feet

I reach a hand out to the pregnant sky

fingers splayed in the slightest

water in the air

dripping down my hands

in my palm, I find 

a reflecting pool 

so clear

with teardrop memories 

reflecting there. 

Author's Note

A poem from my diary :) Just let me know what you think, you can ignore grammar errors in this one. :D

Reviews

[deeps]

I think that this is a wonderful and most beuatiful write.
It's soft and well written. You are very talented!

[Jean]

I love how you say "the pregnant sky"
Lol. XD

You have a wonderful flow with this one. :)

I don't think you need the double 'and' in the third line though. Its unnecessary.

Also you end with a very strong uhm sound? for your last word. "Back". Your poem is very calming yet I think the "ck" sound contradicts it and isn't the best word to use to end the poem.

Jean :)

[Georgia Gypsy]

What do I think? I think this is wonderful, love the images you have placed in my mind with your words. Though it has a sad undertone, i think it could be tears of joy as well...
Great job pumpkin!!:)