Ode to Forgotten Memories

 

I frown, my hope dies,

Blown away with sands of time-

Lights out, slow sunset,

I wish silent my face wet.

 

I smile as I splash in

Pools of happy memories-

I laugh and I cry and

When I forget, inside I die.

 

Peace for you, but not for me.

Author's Note

Any and all feedback is appreciated. Thanks.

Reviews

[Kelley Pascoe]

Peace for you, but not for me was a very strong way to end a poem. I loved every word in this piece and another line I really liked was...........................
"When I forget, inside I die." It saddens my heart to know a person can feel so sad. This was a great write Aista Aini! thanks for sharing.
Kelley Frost

[Raven Onyx Feire`]

i like it. it was sad but inlightening. im not really up to reviewing right now... sorrry
raven

[Gypsy Willow]

Beautifully written. Your work always moves something in my heart. Even if memories begin to fade, we never quite lose eachother. Like I said before, write down the little things you remember, a favourite perfume, sunday morning breakfast, an inside joke. It might hurt to think about, but it will help to preserve the memories. I love the line "Peace for you, but not for me." It gives it that spark of truth, that really close look at your soul. Good job.

[Tomás Ó C..]

Whether happy or sad, we cry reguardless. I call it washing the windows to the soul. Being a macho chap of course I never cry... unless peeling onions or the mammy tells me Im a lazy good for nothin little swine that I am!

[O!]

I was actually thinking of Memories and it all fading this morning......i actually thought of writing something on that line......but uve done it so beautifully.........its like a gift to me this morning......

i especially love Peace for you, but not for me.....

your memories still remind you of what should be remembered by the other too......which makes ur face wet.....bringing u no peace......as ur memories ur thoughts.....should make u smile and laugh without having to make u cry....

oh peace to u my dear.....lovely :-)

x,
O!

[Travis Ralston aka LIAR]

Nice. I liked the style you used here. I take it as your fading memories are beneficial to another, but not you.

[James K. Blaylock]

i really enjoyed reading your poem. to me it seems to be about growing older,and losing one's thoughts with age. i liked this stanza the most

I smile as I splash in
Pools of happy memories-
I laugh and I cry and
When I forget, inside I die.