Placid

 

River of Sorrow

Nearest by-

 

As I walk, I hear

Blackbirds’ cry-

 

When my Moon darkens

I falter-

 

Haunting black waters

Consume me-

 

You fly, I drown.

Author's Note

Any and all feedback is appreciated. Thanks.

Reviews

[Bob Carney, "Soon ..]

There's a lot being alluded to in very few words which in itself, is talent. I see several interpretations, but the first is the strongest. I see a circle of life with heavy symbolism represented by the blackbird (harbingers of evil or death) and the moon (mystery, terror and life). Rivers are often used to symbolize life and death as you used in "Haunting Black waters". This is really an exceptional poem. Thanks for sharing with us.

[The Grey Pilgrim]

Very chilling! Classic scary imagry and excellent flow! Great job!

[Robert Luna]

Very cool piece. A really enjoyable read. Made me think of this

Where do words go
if they are never heard
Where do dreams go
if we never sleep
Where did we go
if we never awake
the answer is darkness

[O!]

It seems u search for a place where u feel 'calm' but instead thoughts of haunting sadness follows u only making places which would normally bring peace, become 'dark' instead, making u drown in what u want to escape from.....

lovely write.....could have many interpretations......

spread ur wings....u can fly too....


xxx
O!

[Kelley Pascoe]

This was a cool poem Aista Aini! I like how dark it is and it kind of reminds me of a vampire poem.
I may be way off , but I know I liked it!! Thanks for sharing.
Kelley Frost

[Gypsy Willow]

I do believe I have read this before. Like I said previously, I find it very deep and very beautiful. You never cease to amaze me with your talent.