The Taken

 

The tongue cuts razor sharp

Causing angels to drop their harps-

Silence is the best defense

Removing need for recompense-

 

Many forget their self-control

When pursuing a foolish goal-

Selfish mindset takes appalling toll

Thoughtless actions cannot console-

 

Never allow the tongue commence

Rending flesh and stealing innocence-

Silence is the best defense

Much better than dire offense-

Reviews

[Narnie]

Oh I should take notice of this. I have always opened my mouth and voiced my opinions/feelings - regardless of the blurp that might come out. A considered poem that has a gentle message on a strong opinion.

[Erotic Goddess]

Never allow the tongue commence
Rending flesh and stealing innocence-
Silence is the best defense
Much better than dire offense-

I must say in part, sometimes I disagree. Sometimes words are the best defense, much better than violence or other things. Some people need to be offended with words chosen and wielded with skillful precision. But then again, that is just the Sagittarius b***h in me speaking there. :)

I liked this, it was well written, and makes a good point.

[Ms.dmarie]

wow..3 short stanzas with such powerful impact!!i loved the imagery "silence is the best defense/ removing need for recompense" -wow!!this is a wonderfully thought-provoking piece that makes one think about the consenquence of action and re evaluate their priorities in life

[Annabelle]

well written poem...
"The tongue cuts razor sharp
Causing angels to drop their harps-
Silence is the best defense"
those words simply amazing...thanks for sharing

[O!]

great language, great rhyme, images u create are superb.......
love how u talk about so much in a few lines......very very good!!...

the flow in the last stanza could use a lil fix i think....
Rending flesh, stealing innocence (would sound better, me thinks :-))
the last line too......but its such a great line i wouldnt want to change it :-)

enjoyed this quite a bit!!......:-)

x,
O!

[Robert Luna]

Most enjoyable read. The way you slip through so many images within the mind of your reader is perfect. You place scene in my mind's eye that play out so perfect with your words.

Another great Piece!!!

[Colin H.]

Amazing. Great work =]

[Gypsy Willow]

One of my favourites. You have a talent with words, I hope you never ignore it.

[James K. Blaylock]

i really enjoyed reading this as well. this was my fav part.

Many forget their self-control
When pursuing the foolish goal-
Selfish mindset takes appalling toll
Thoughtless actions cannot console-