Nature's Intelligence

Words begin to fuse
Fostering the enthused mind....
Rhythmic intellect begins to unwind
The significance behind mankind when soul is revealed

So much is concealed
Behind the flesh
We often forget
Our main focus.....

Sun rise hits at 4:48
Sets quick at 7:06
Making way for the climbing moon
North slants the sky at noon
South suited at six
Three makes east
West-pieced-at nine
A solar design
Underlines

Nature’s intelligence

 

Gravitation pulls us towards nothingness
We replace our longitude with solitude
Our latitude with attitude
Stop spinning on our axis
Lacking what we never practice
Blind-sided truths of life
 

Author's Note

I wanted to continue this piece, but I felt it was complete as it stood. Short for me... but complete.

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Nature is such a beautiful entity and always teaches us that the simplest things in life are what make it special we just have to look... a really extraordinary piece with great insight and lesson to all.

[Tha Wind AKA VERBAL OX]

i like, like this sunshine
very calm an soothn

Sun rise hits at 4:48
Sets quick at 7:06
Making way for the climbing moon
North slants the sky at noon
South suited at six
Three makes east
West-pieced-at nine
A solar design
Underlines

Nature's intelligence



Gravitation pulls us towards nothingness
We replace our longitude with solitude
Our latitude with attitude
Stop spinning on our axis
Lacking what we never practice
Blind-sided truths of life

this is like almost the whole piece i kno... but it really hit home wit the creativity
the flow an the intelligence...groovy 4 u to write... fly 4 me 2 read...

1luv mrs poet

[Michael X]

LiLi, this is insightful, passionate, imaginative and the thought is fully charged with imagery, as well as knowledge, beautifully written and a pleasure to read.

[None]

A poem that is well worded and calls for reflection on what is hidden. Your poem is fresh and pleasantly different calling to mind so many star bursts of thoughts. Excellent poem and the length is perfect.

[RAWR!]

sometimes its hard to accept the shortness of a piece,
but remember that usually the shorter a piece the better, since it means a person can read 2 of them. ^^

very nice and tight rhymes, i liked the wordplay alot, you flow well. (thats a pun)

[A.J. Smith]

I love your fusion here, Li Li, of time and space (interesting that I'd never in my mind made the strong connection between a clock face and a compass rose), of geography and psychology...certainly a thought-provoking piece (as are all of your works)...I long to hear it in your voice to rhythm.