His Culmination

*shrugs* Just went with what I felt. The format.... well.... just wanted to do something different. I used punctuation! WOO HOO! Probably didn't use it accordingly... but hey... I try. :O)

I look in his eyes growing hypnotized; seeing in him what I see within.
He's the passionate fruit leading me to sin
Where my soul leaves off, you will find his begin.

I see religion....
A place where truth is revealed,

Godlike features found concealed within his flesh.

There's a bond some could never understand.
Love felt when possessed in the palm of your hand;
gliding to the tips of your fingers where emotional intellect lingers,
waiting to be exposed.

 

As letters are transposed, the sensation grows.
I'll continue to turn his pages to understand his culmination;
Longing for his fertilization to become my salvation.

He held my hand through the belt of the Orion.

He became my lion, my king, my strength.
Teaching me the length between heart, mind, and soul.
 He made me whole.

Reviews

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

At first I thought you were metaphorically speaking of God, but instead it is a man who brings you to these heights. Nice job. Didn't rhyme, but somehow almost flowed like a rhyme when I read it. Nice job. I loved the end:

He held my hand through the belt of the Orion.
He became my lion, my king, my strength.
Teaching me the length between heart, mind, and soul.
He made me whole.

I love lions, so this is a favorite part to me. I can tell, when you write you let it flow. It's a natural gift to you. tahnks for sharing.

[Legion]

No mere mortal then? Hope you let him know. :)

[J. Hampton]

Sha ~ ZAM !!!!

I know this man ....is " made-of SOMETHIN' ! "
No regular ....run-of-the-mill ....weak-gamed...self-famed... street-strained ...or 1/2 -brained
cat is gonna have ( Li-Li ...wide-OPEN like that ! )

tight braid of emotional...lyrical ...spiritual perfection

Blessssssssss

[Mr. Deft Diction]

Ooohhh....that's high props for such a mere mortal; but it just goes to show how we can become more when we accept the bond of a woman, to help take us there.

Great piece, Li.

[A LaDy NaMeD D]

I think you used puncuation nicely. This is another good write from you *that i've read* lol. The reader can tell you love this man, but you never really say it. It's sort of implied.