[th]is

this is my padded cell. my confessional.
this is my sanity. this is my sanctuary.
these are my wings. these are my scars.
these are the words of a condemned man.

"and he just smoked my eyelids
and punched my cigarette"*

some things, my friend, are never meant,
to see the light of another day
but some things need to be released
the pressure is building, exceeding limitations
these are the words of a condemned man.

"he built a fire on Main Street
and shot it full of holes"*

this is my bared soul. naked on the beach,
quivering and shivering and bleeding dry
this is the safest place, for the middle of the night
where the ghosts of forever cannot haunt or torment
where the memories are nothing but.
these are the words of a condemned man.

"but the post office has been stolen
all the mailboxes locked"*

these are my deepest fears.
these are my deepest scars.
these are my only moments.
these are my disease.
this is my confessional. my padded cell,
where i can beat my head against the wall

"oh mama, can this really be the end?
to be stuck inside of mobile, with the memphis blues again"*

 

 

 

 

*Bob Dylan . Stuck Inside of Mobile with the Memphis Blues Again

Reviews

[S. J. Fisk]

this is my bared soul. naked on the beach,
quivering and shivering and bleeding dry
this is the safest place, for the middle of the night
where the ghosts of forever cannot haunt or torment
where the memories are nothing but.
these are the words of a condemned man.

Amazing imagery. I mean, phenomenal. I can feel the pain here, it's palatable. I adore this

[luthien7]

This flows beautifully and I can imagine it being perfomed on a silent stage in semi-darkness before an enthralled crowd. For content your images are very well done, and express so much (I can only say I relate, and from a point of view you may not have intented but that is the beauty of language that a statement can say so many divergent things). Great work. I can't offer no criticism.

" this is the safest place, for the middle of the night
where the ghosts of forever cannot haunt or torment
where the memories are nothing but.
these are the words of a condemned man. "

[Susan S.]

This is quite unusual. The thing that is even more unusual is that you don't have more reviews! Someone this good, you should make 'em flock to ya.

[Steve Thompson]

Interesting piece, and nice usage of Dylans line. Interesting structure to shape your voice....well done.

[Damian Alan Gray]

Congratulations! [th]is has been selected as the Featured Work of the Week at the Vicious Circle!

[Damian Alan Gray]

As the source of inspiration, I'm sure that the Voice (Dylan) would love this read. Remarkably well-written and it beats throughout. I'd love to hear this piece spoken.