War of Words

The turn of phrase "Words can never hurt you" may be true in a physical aspect, but sometimes, words cut...deep. Maybe it's the soul, or the mind that takes the sting of verbal assault.

I’ve been fighting you

For oh too long

Even if you beat me

I re-enter fight

Come back strong

Only for another defeat

To the other soldiers

I am strong

But nothing for your whole army

But War of Words

I’ll push on

Cause words can never hurt me…

Author's Note

Feel free to critique but please do not list things you do not like about the writing without telling me how I can improve. Thank you all :)

Reviews

[BThomvanWart]

When I first read this, I thought "This sounds really interesting...but, something's off about the timing." And then I thought for a second and it clicked - that's what makes it interesting. I would suggest adjusting the timing and making it more rhythmic, but that would make it lose some of it's integrity. I like the bulky timing because it brings into my mind how war really is, how an argument can be. There's no perfection, just calculated moves that hit or miss. I enjoyed the read, Sue. Kudos!

[Sue]

Thanks! I thought about making it more rhythmic with a smoother flow, but you're right, the reason I made it less rhythmic was because I wanted the poem to sound more "matter of fact" and a bit all over the place because I'm a bit defeated.
Thanks for the review and I'm glad you liked it!

[wordman]

war of words,sticks and stones break my bones but words wont hurt me
great theme

[Sue]

Thank you!

[wordman]

you`re welcome,welcome to w/c

[MandaBear]

I think this poem was great. Words can hurt and sometimes we do need to get up and fight. We shouldn't have to take them laying down. Great job!

[Sue]

Thank you :) Though I like to pretend that words don't hurt, they do, but I have to fight them off :)