No More Happy Endings

In our once beautiful world, magic and beauty seems to have faded away.

In a land, dark and twisted,

Lies lurk around every corner.

There were few able to escape,

Their thoughts on the back-burner. 

This land was once a vision,

A beauty to behold,

But someone's sight was tainted,

And let this lovely world fold.

Instead of love, a hate,

Instead of light, a dark mist.

Agony and despair set in,

A new string on Death's list.

It was never meant to be this way.

Dreams became nightmares,

The world became a place,

Where hate better fares.

In a land, dark and twisted,

Corruption caused reality bending.

In our land, dark and twisted,

There are no more happy endings. 

Author's Note

I'd really appreciate a review with constructive criticism so I know what to work on. thank you :)

Reviews

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OH THAT RHYMED WHAT FUN!!!!!! :D Anyways big sissy, that was really good, it had great flow within the words and I was just omnoming it like food ^-^....strawberries O.o ... cause they are THE best! :P Great job Mandy! :D

[de_maruf]

mmh

[Moon]

This describes our world now . Before man began to view himself as a God nature was abundant and as beautiful as she is suppose to be , but now she has been manipulated and man has bit off more than he can chew . Things are in chaos now and our world is unraveling at the seams . It is very sad .

[Sophie]

One of my favorites from you :) When I was reading it I was imagining the world before humans and then... now. 'Dreams became nightmares' its so true. You dream of becoming a fashion designer, after years and years of failure, you finally get there and think its all going to change, but then no one buys your line, and every day becomes a living hell, becomes your dreams were crushed. Honestly, the world sucks.

[Shreyas Tripathy]

"This land was once a vision,
A beauty to behold,
But someone's sight was tainted,
And let this lovely world fold."
These lines set the tone of the poem so well ....
Incredible thought and great idea and definitely presented equally well !!
I loved it ! Good job :)

[Ahmad Cox]

I have to admit I really liked this one. There isn't anything that I can really critically analyze about it.

[Allycat]

I can't criticize it either! I thought you did a wonderful job!
I love the imagery you used in this piece
wonderful job, as always :)

[Abbie]

I don't know how to really critisize this piece Amanda, sorry. It was really good. I honestly can't say that I foundanything in it that I thought could use work, of wasn't good. I liked it. it was great. keep it up amanda. :)

[Steven Cash]

Epic job Chunky Buddy