I Wish

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I wish, I wish upon a star,

That you were not so very far,

I wish, I wish upon the light,

That I could hold you late at night,

I wish, I wish upon a well,

That your fears I could always quell, 

 I wish, I wish upon my heart,

That we will never ever part,

I wish, I wish upon the stone,

That you will always call me home,

And if I wish all of these too,

You must now know that I love you.

Reviews

[Patrick Henry]

You are so freakin' cute! : ) I never know how to comment on you when I come upon your page, for I know that what seems like often lately..... you are not as upbeat as this poem lets on about. I think you are absolutely adorable in this poem and where would this poem NOT be enjoyed? I love it. I don't consider this to be a "deep romantic write"....like suggested, but I do see it whimsical, adorable, and fun to recite! *Big Hugzz* I actually consider your "darker" writings more romantic than not. : ) They are laced with truth and a humble quality, and that is why I LOVE visiting you!! I've been a huge, but silent, fan of yours since my beginning here...... xoxo -Mark

[Amanda]

yaaaaaaay thanks haha

[Jordan's Back]

Another deep Romantical Write :)

[de_maruf]

fine

[CreativeStroke]

The repitition of the words "I wish, I wish" really brought this poem together.
You conveyed your emotions well and I believe you really made this piece shine with your rhyme scheme. I really enjoyed it.

[Amanda]

Thanks :)

[Amandaaa Caroline (:]

I really like this(: it's really cute and sweet, and I like the whole "I wish" thing (: great job with this!

[Damien Davison]

Great poem! I liked the 'I wish, I wish' concept, flowed very nicely, it was short and sweet. Good job!

[Amanda]

Thanks :)

[David the writer]

I know how you feel here. Good job with conveying emotions, and nice flow.

[Amanda]

Thanks

[Ahmad Cox]

Aww. Very sweet

[Amanda]

Thanks :)

[David the writer]

Np, watch out I got news so I'm gonna pm ya :D

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Very beautiful ,Amanda. :)

[Amanda]

Thanks dude :)