Suicide

A random poem about suicide that I wrote when I was depressed.

Its trickling down my face,
My heart slows its pace,
My body is numb,
What have I done?
I didn't want this,
Yet I accepted death's kiss,
With every touch,
The harder I clutch,
Onto the life that I let go,
I never thought I'd end up so low,
I never thought I'd end up here,
Where there is no one to hear,
My screams that echo from the empty halls,
As I slide down the plain black walls,
There's no way back,
For a body I lack,
I'm forever alone,
Never to go home.

Author's Note

Sorry for any grammatical errors.
Thanks for reading.
What do you think?

Reviews

[AWSklavos]

Hello. I think it was quite a nice poem, if I had to criticise anything about it it may be that the rhythm seems much the same for the entire poem. Perhaps it might read a little better if it was broken up in the middle, or a change of the rhyming pattern. In any case, nice work.

[S.J. Holmes]

All right, thank you for reading and the critique.

[Adri]

I think it was really great, it really got me thinking. I love your work by the way(:

[S.J. Holmes]

Thank you for reading :)