Cloak and Dagger

The satire of my love life.

 

When moon is high

And the world’s asleep

The earth will sigh

As my lover creeps

 

Down the stairs

And past the hearth

As fast as he dares

Into my heart

 

High price we pay

To keep concealed

From the day

The love we feel

 

So through the gate

Into the wood

Around the lake

To do no good

 

In the darkness

No one sees

Through the broadness

Of the trees

 

Keep to the shadows

Stay out of the light

Our breathing is shallow

As we take flight

 

No one must know

Where we have been

We must not show

The love we fell in

 

The cost too great

For a misstep

The will of Fate

They will not accept

 

So be cautious of harm

And dodge the hounds

Into my arms

Where love abounds

 

Be not a lagger

Leap over the stream

Wear cloak and dagger

When you’re with me

Reviews

[Nicholas Hallows]

I was also drawn to this by the title. Just goes to show the power of a good title!
I liked the poem too.
I particularly enjoyed the first three stanzas. Especially:

When moon is high
And the world's asleep
The earth will sigh
As my lover creeps

Good work!

NH

[R J Askew]

I was drawn to this by the title, which I like... Satire? Hmm? So is this you joking with youself in some way? Is the lover a fantasy? Or are you describing a real affair? Or is it a hoped for lover? It could be all of these but my guess is it's the last one. Ach, I'm in knots. But it sounds exciting and risque.

[Ross Davison]

This piece would make a great song! Bluesy and distant. Nice work!

[Red Raven]

the rhythm of darkness shows clearly in here.
It's a well prepared piece with rich languages.

'The earth will sigh
As my lover creeps'
- This remind me of a line in 'Sula' by Toni Morrison.

Keep writing :O)

[Sarah]

Beautiful piece. I enjoyed reading it. The flow you put in it just really helps the reader go from the beginning to the end. Great work.

[Aries]

Well written.....You have a way with words....Great write....

[Crystal Mullings]

Is this about death? It sounds like an estranged lover waiting to take back what she can't keep. hmmm sounds great!

[Robert Luna]

This had such a wonderful flow and internal beat to it. I think this would be a great spoken word piece. I love spoken words as i write a lot of them I like the strength of heart beat rhythm that this held. The words flow so seamless and purposefully.


Great Job!!!!!