My Side of the Story

This tongue tied creature, colorless
and living in endings
and the little moments
where I pushed you away
you'll find me
composing myself
under the covers
my eyes dead dry
the tears thrive on the inside
You'll never convince me
that I am hard to hold
with the lights off
you persecuted me with trickery
like my hair wrapped around your finger
so you have me
permeated
Only you fold my will in half
and for this I can never forgive you.
These twisted intentions that
twine around everything
have begun to unravel
I am formless,
knowing you has changed me
from something to nothing
but worthless sounds
Only for you would I hide
where you can see me
in complete chaos
and for this I can never forget you

Reviews

[The Flawed]

This to me tells the story of someone how is being totally dominated by her partner. She has entered this relationship as a strong willed person, and little by little her will and her strength has been chipped at, till there is nothing left.
But what do I know?
Great poem.

[DavidRyan]

This tongue tied creature, colorless
and living in endings
and the little moments

Such a strong opening. The words almost tying themselves over and under one another. And just the line "living in endings..." that is probably the best thing I have read. That is so f****n' brilliant.

Only you fold my will in half
and for this I can never forgive you.

Isn't this called love?