the first song . . .

i thus wrote the first song for you
filling it with
the burdened silence
of un-uttered words
and their endless meanings.
and when you open your sky
to listen to its longing,
the song will discover its tune
and the endless music it possesses.

,..

Reviews

[audrie]

This reminds me of music left to be interpreted from the point of view of the listener. It can hold a different meaning to everyone who listens to it. lovely poem

[Swaroop Manikandan]

there you go :-)

[Namrata]

I prefer not speaking much, let my tone of appreciation unite with the song, somewhere in space.

[Swaroop Manikandan]

that's a warm and beautiful comment...

[priya]

Its deep and I can feel it. There's so much to say but there are no words...

[Swaroop Manikandan]

true... we just find them mirroring in the other...

[Gurleen Saluja]

a decent write, nicely penned :)

[Sophy Freebirds]

Loved the essence of it
Song will have the lyrical quality if only the muse hears it.. :) nice and sweet write

~Sophy

[Swaroop Manikandan]

very true... :)

thanks for the review...

[Frozen Eyes]

wow loved it hope the song finds its music :)

[Swaroop Manikandan]

thanks dear friend for stopping by... i too hope the same :-)

[Wynter Page]

This is so beautiful!
"filling it with
the burdened silence
of un-uttered words" - love this part!
wonderful flow

[Swaroop Manikandan]

thank you Wynter :-)

[escherflight]

On reading the first four lines, I thought this was a bit undisciplined, indulgent and vague, but you draw it all together superbly. A great structure and a lovely, romantic idea.

[Swaroop Manikandan]

thanks friend for the review... i just go with the flow while writing...

[Matching Socks]

I have a feeling if it kept going the writer and his muse would then dance, and dance

[Swaroop Manikandan]

yeah :-) . . .