Feeling apart

Something I wrote when I was 19 and felt like I was spending too much time drinking and hanging out with my friends instead of being with my family.

The full moon is bright, just trying to make it home safe

Sometimes i’m too brave, driving after a few coors lights

“I promise i’ll be fine” is what i tell my “best friends”

Laughing with my family is what i’m thinking i could’ve been doing then

Instead i’m swerving left and right watching my rear view mirror

It's a monday so there aren’t many cops out tonight

I scraped my right tires parking out front of my parents house again

I promise to myself once again that i’ll never do this again

Barging through the front door at 2 o’clock at night again

I hope my sister didn’t wake up and squeeze her pillow tight

I wish she looked up to me and i made her smile bright

7th grade was rough for me but i hope she’s doing alright

I avoid turning on the lights and skip brushing my teeth again

Pass out on the couch with my jeans and shoes on again

Just hoping I wake up and get to catch mom and dad before they go to work again

Author's Note

Any input is much appreciated

Reviews

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

A thoughtful piece..
From heart of a boy who loves his family..
It is really important to realise their importance in our lives, because at the end of any life problem, the people whom you gonna find at your side are friends and family.. So value them.
Keep up the good work! :)

[StimulateyourCreativity]

Thank you!! Definitely felt like a little boy again reading this, appreciate it!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are welcome. Narrator does sound like a little boy. :)

[McBear]

This was honestly a deep subject. I actually shed a tear because of the way you put it all. I wrote this paragraph from inspiration of what you wrote.

The narrator loves his family, but his problems and depression overtake him. He swears to himself he will change, but the sadness gets in the way. He wakes up too late to see his parents. The silver tears roll down his cheek, as he smashes his fists into the wall. "I just wanna be better again; I want my family to be proud.

[Bear]

Reading this made my own conscious come alive, memories of my youth flooded back into my mental reality. Being able to reach into someone else's mind with a few written words is an incredible ability. Standing Ovation! Clap, clap, clap, clap!

[StimulateyourCreativity]

Thank you so much!! I appreciate it :)

[sinNsincerity]

Sick write bro and I can really hear your voice in this.
I've walked and still continue to walk in those shoes just with different shades of eyes...
I can highly relate to this, I'm sure others can too, and if they don't... f**k it!
Perfectly written and said!

[StimulateyourCreativity]

Thanks my man, hard to find the balance but it is important too!

[Kajal Sharma]

nice work....friends and family both have equal importance in life...and poem is honest situation of the poet to balance both...good job

[StimulateyourCreativity]

Definitely very important to have balance, thank you!!

[AaronFreitas]

Nice work... a very honest write. I can't lie and say I haven't been in the same situation just hoping to make it home.. it's much better relaxing with family than putting your own life on the line :) Nice work :)

[StimulateyourCreativity]

Thank you Aaron!! means a lot