My Knight

My lips are lonely without thee my knight
'Tis not thine enemy I fear,
Whilst mine heart is weary by candlelight
Thy bones ache with every tear.

 

Without thou, mine lips are wither'd
Thus; a mere thorn without a red rose,
Henceforth, thy love, cometh hither
Sweet petals of thy heart dost close.

 

My knight with armour, sword and blood
In a distance thine ears hear cries,
Thy lips bid adieu, thy kiss of rosebud
Thou art a bright star in thine eyes.

 

Thy feathered quill on parchment stains,
Tears and blood ink whilst moonlight wanes.

 

©SyberRose

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading...Warmly, SyberRose

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Not as good as your natural style but still good.
One question?
'Thy lips are lonely without thee my knight'
Should this not read
'My lips are lonely without thee my knight'
else he is kissing the mirror lol!

[SyberRose]

I will change that than...thanks for pointing that out...I do get confused with the thys thous and thees haa...I like to do these because they drive me crazy.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Respect dear poetess1

[Dream Weaver]

The Kings English hasn't been wasted here...Beautifully done!

D.W.

[SyberRose]

Thank you Dream Weaver...I like that name...nice to hear from you today.
SyberRose

[Dream Weaver]

You're quite welcome and might I add ditto. :)

[jerrypat]

The deepest hurts are those put upon us by those who profess their eternal love. Lonely nights are agonizing indeed, and you have pointed that out in you own sonnet-inspired way. This is a good poem and thank you for posting it for everyone to enjoy. By the way, I don't give ratings. I don't see the sense of it. If ratings mean anything why bother commenting, that is where the true feelings are.

[SyberRose]

Thank you so much for taking time to comment Jerry...Im suppose to be making potato salad right now but Im reading poetry instead ha...SyberRose

[Chris]

Perhaps it's my mind's American voice but it seems to stumble - even after three times through.

I like the olde styles flavour...

[SyberRose]

I think you are right about the first line in the third stanza...I will change that to my armoured knight, instead of my knight with amour..thank you for peeking in and I do appreciate your opinion...SyberRose

[zainul]

The piece gives the virgin flavor of a great sonnet of the past.
Amazing abab cdcd efef gg rhyming.
(What happens if rosebuds at the 11th line changed to 'rosebud' ?)
Adore your lovely work.

[SyberRose]

Thank you for pointing that out...what happens is I will remove that extra S. I do appreciate your review zainul. thank you so much...SyberRose

[zainul]

Now it looks perfect.
I feel very happy that you write such lovely sonnet.

[SyberRose]

thank you zainul.

[zainul]

You are always welcome :)