Mediocre

My first poem...hope it's okay!

Mediocre

Average

Inferior

Are just a few words

That wrap around me

Open my eyes to whom I really am.

Mediocre

Average

Inferior

I sit in a room full of others, loved, beautiful, talented, smart.

Yet the only words to describe me

Mediocre

Average 

Inferior

I watch some hold hands, 

and speak promised words that were broken to me.

I watch ones who get all the looks,

perfect skin, makeup, hair, bodies

I watch ones that don't need to work,

They're perfect at everything they do.

I watch ones with perfect grades,

known where they'll go in life.

When they watch me what do they see?

Mediocre

Average

Inferior

Author's Note

My first poem, I hope it's okay -.-

Reviews

[MAC]

well your writing and style does not reflect your content. an excellent write

[Lucien Maier]

Excellent Formatting. It makes your eyes dance through the piece. Very well done.

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If this is your 1st poem I can't wait to read the others. You've got lots of talent! 100/100

[justthatgirl34]

this is exactly how i feel everyday. this really spoke to me. and it's really good especially for a first.

[Schyala]

Thank you :)

[Caradoc]

Ah, the insecurities of youth, dare I say, the insecurities of humanity. Look deeper. Even as you see others as perfect, or close to it, those that don't need to work, or the ones that are always noticed, remember this.

We all have our own faults, our own regrets, things that we hide from the world. Everyone has a mask they wear to hide whatever they deem to be dark truths about themselves, things they never wish for others to know. Rare is the person who is truly two dimensional.

And it is obvious to those who read your poetry, the first though this is, that you are not two dimensional and far from mediocre, average, or inferior. You just need to hang in there until the right people peer past your mask and perceive the real you. The one who can weave words together and form something called a poem, art of voice, mind and soul all rolled into one.

Not bad. Don't stop writing.

-Caradoc

[Ian H Morrison]

mediocre i do not think so brilliance is what i read and see keep it up you simply have talent that will get better as time goes on well done

[Harley (arbiter)]

I like it and can relate a lot great job! Keep it up!

[Lydia]

Absolutely amazing and very relatable! Hard to believe it is your first poem. I wish my first poem was this good. My first poem was crappideedooda.

[♥ Kinnixk]

I love it! Is this really your first poem?
You can add "talented" to your traits, because you are very good at poems. :)
100/100

[Becky]

I refuse to believe that this is your first poem.

It's wonderful. Powerful message. I liked the repetition. Honestly, I can't find anything you could have done better. Excellent work. 100/100

So you write well and play flute...

You are my new favorite person.

[Schyala]

Haha thank you so much! :)