Haiku for the Angels

This is my first haiku ever so take it easy :3 haha

Heaven and Hell panic
Dust specks gather, sand grains fall
Lost, broken angels

Reviews

[Norah]

i like it !
simple and perfect

[Pax]

are you takling about angles or angels...either way it fits well...and for the haiku stuff Crowbar is right... But then again its your firs try...Your doing great already...
Keep it up...

[Aurora Dawn]

Thankyou,
I am trying to decide if haikus are really my "thing"
I appreciate the review:)

[Crowbar]

I am almost certain that the syllable pattern for a haiku is 5, 7, 5. You've got 6, 7, 5. And if you mean "angels" instead of "angles," it's beautiful. ^_^

[Aurora Dawn]

Haha yes, thankyou for pointing out my mistakes.
This is my first haiku after all :3

[Crowbar]

I'm sure your next one will be perfect :)

[Aurora Dawn]

I hope so :3