The world alive Behind her eyes.

I'm not sure about this one. I like the idea. I tried to organize it out in my head more but I'm not so sure about it. :P

Alive and thriving

Within a girl of only 15

Trapped dreams

Misleading

Teasing

Taunting

 

 

 

Only 15

Dreams there so far from reality

But she could be something

Like you’ve never seen

Her smile it shines

Behind her eyes

The world is alive

 

Moving

Rushing

Pushing the doubt behind

She won’t stop trying

Because for dreams as big

and longed for as hers there’s little time

Author's Note

Opinions welcome and appreciated very much. Take care all!

Reviews

[TheFemininePad]

This is a good poem. You might want to shrink the size of the font, and remove the bold from the font. I can feel your emotions behind your writing in this one. I could feel sadness within your heart. I would suggest organizing your thoughts more on paper before publishing though.

[Randolf Ramos]

how sad the air is. when someone part of someone will be gone. I could feel the sadness that your words evoke.