Stranger

Talking to the stranger within!

Stranger

From the moment of birth
To the bitter instant of death
Stranger soul aching for one more breath
…
Beyond the years
Behind the rusty emptiness
Between the present and your memories
Stranger you're dwelling within the darkness

Your dragon awakes

Breathing fire into your veins
Burning rage lost within your devils
"My demons unleashed"
"Into flames mercy died"
"I will give them a reason to bleed"

Beyond the years
Behind the rusty emptiness
Between the present and your memories
Stranger you're dwelling within the darkness

On your knees
This ground blood it feeds
But is it yours or your enemies?
"Let me tell you a thing or two"
"Looking through my window"
"I watched as the monsters grew"

Beyond the years
Behind the rusty emptiness
Between the present and your memories
Stranger you're dwelling within the darkness

"The light is fading into dark"
"Flip open the twins ready to attack"
"Backed up with a wall behind my back"

Stranger…
You stood here once before
Wondering where you went wrong
Facing a faceless army ready for war
Forever into battle is that truly where you belong?

Author's Note

This I just wrote, I don't know it feels strange maybe the end isn't my usual close and that reason, or maybe its just me I don't know, anyway I hope you enjoy it

All the best,
Tamer Qtaish

Reviews

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Wow.. lots of emotions pouring through this.. with your inner demon or dark side symbolized as the dragon for rage pouring into your veins.. a sense of a born fighter.. fighting oneself perhaps as much as through life itself. Most question their goals, life, inner-being.. self-acceptance can be hard.

I can relate to the wondering where one went wrong in life.. more than once pondering purpose and meaning in life.. and so much more. This was really great.. and gave an open look to a self-reflection of battle with oneself and/or roots.. great creative job!

[Katseye]

Wow really good my friend.

[Norma M Sutton]

This is a interesting poem. I like it.

[Tracie Skarbo]

I like that you have broken away from rounding the poem with words you have started with. I think ending in the question forces the reader to ponder what you have said longer. I found the lines in " to be an interesting style ... it works without feeling awkward.

[Anthony M Smith Jr]

I enjoyed your words and like the way your mind see's.
TT-TTO-TT-NI-K
Elk

[Wicahpi]

I enjoyed the read. Emma turned me on, so thanks to her.
There is indeed a certain stranger in each of us.
well done!

[Sheila Kline]

Your write gives me cause to stop and reflect about the stranger within me...what lurks inside? What thoughts form that should not form?
You have been able to make one take a deep look at human behavior, and attempt to discern reasons for certain actions. Let us not give them reasons to bleed!
Well done, and I thank Emma for referring me to read it!

[Ellen Hammond]

It seems we all have a stranger within that can suddenly take over when the right buttons are pushed. This is a great, thought-provoking write. It has a nice rhyme and flow and gives us each a lot to ponder about our own stranger within.

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem. The story brought me into the poem. So many strong lines in your poem. I like the whole poem. A pleasure to read.
Coyote

[Mr. Misanthrope]

I love the endless amount of symbolism and imagery you provide in this poem. Like the dragon, and the rusty emptiness. I particularly liked this 'rusty emptiness' stanza. I immediately thought of a big, rusty, iron door, complete with large bolts. Very scary and solid.

Well done! The darkness that haunts you has now infected your poetry. I can feel it.

Luke:)