Flick

This is an old poem I didnt realise wasn't uploaded. Remember it is an OLD one. I have changed since this. All comments appreciated

 

Ugly

Flick

Worthless

Flick

Fat

Flick

Stupid

Flick

Loner

Flick

Loser

Flick

No

Flick

One

Flick

Wants

Flick

You

Flick

 

Rubber band

On the wrist

An attempt to stop cutting

 

Wrists red raw

Stinging pain

Momentarily

 

No cuts

No scars

Still the pain

 

Is this better?

Is this worse?

Is this working

 

Popping a pill

To make it better

Makes me worse

 

What to do

All so tough

Want to end it all

 

 

 

Author's Note

Remember its old! Please comment!

Reviews

[lovejulez03]

Well I'm late on my review, apologies! You hit home with this one hun! I haven't read anything quite like it. It has a harsh point and a harsh reality and the poem itself is cutting and honest. This is just what I needed to read today, as weird as that sounds. A wonderful piece of work by a talented individual. You did a great job on this!

[tanaya]

No apologies needed :) Thanks :3

[trainwreck]

My goodness. You are an amazingly talented writer. Our older works always show us a part of ourselves, and it's always really interesting to see how we've changed. Great job!

[tanaya]

Thanks :3

[TheKaylaPup]

I really like it, but the word "Flick" doesn't seem quite the right word to describe what you are doing, perhaps snap? I don't know. Good poem regardless. I do hope you're doing better now. =)

[tanaya]

It actually does describe what im doing hahaha. Thanks I really am! :D

[junaid altaf]

a vivid idea......
so subtle and smooth...

[tanaya]

Thanks

[junaid altaf]

ur welcome

[MAC]

repeating works well for this....almost like a chanting. excellent

[tanaya]

Thanks

[Cassie Fraga]

repetition in expressing is always a brilliant way to go, and you my friend did it perfect.

[tanaya]

Thanks

[Becky C Strukamp]

It fit a pattern of anxiety ridden feelings.

[tanaya]

Thanks

[unshakenScene]

i gave felt the same before but other than that is a good write

[tanaya]

Thanks

[unshakenScene]

no prob

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice flow of thoughts and words. I like the way you used the repetition to make your point. No easy life. Just people who get stronger and never give up. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[tanaya]

Thanks :D