Worthless

You don't understand.

You don't see my reflection.

You don't see that I'm worth nothing.

 

No one sees me.

No one will save me.

No one will even glance in my direction.

 

I see my reflection.

I see who I truly am.

I see that I'm worthless.

I see that the pain doesn't stop.

I see that I'm losing it.

I see that I can fight no longer.

I see that I'm too far gone.

Reviews

[Brenden Taylor]

Well, I'm definitely feeling the negativity from this piece. But that aside, I like the devices you've used so far: starting the lines in the stanzas with the same words. Definitely sets a rhythm and tone. However, to speak of content, it's a little narcissistic - eleven out of thirteen lines, "I' or "my ____" is the focus - and redundant. And such redundancy offers no resolution, which was something I was craving.

In short, decent enough crafting, but too redundant.

[Leonard Birch]

Interesting piece Taylor.
Thank you.