Depth

I wrote this poem back in 2011 and felt it should be the first poem I posted because it was the first poem I've ever shared with anyone.

Broken Glass of the weak
misplaced in sight but still seek
The depth of this water shallow yet deep
Dreams and Reality is where they meet
I grasp on to concepts of dreams as reality seeps through
The cold bitterness that slams down my hopes and reaches for my ambition as I climb this never ending ladder
The depth of this water shallow yet deep
Reality turns to deception as broken dreams turn to aggression
I stand
In broken glass
My eyes closed my heart aches as I try hold on to my dreams
Or maybe to reality because it seems things are never as they seem
The Depth of this water so shallow yet deep
I step in and dont obtain what a seek
The depth of this water so shallow yet deep
i drown in pain fear and regrets
no one hears my screams
This water murky and green
And my worst enemy work hand and hand to descise my dreams
Me
i try to escape reality
i close my eyes and jump into this seemly shallow water but its deep

Reviews

[Dwayne J. Keeves]

Very nice poem Tay. May I encourage you to capitalize
'' I ? '' I have problems with punctuations mostly. I highly encourage anyone to point my mistakes out please.

[Tay]

Thanks But I dont this is just an online form , Something like a blog if it were a book then I would understand but it isn't I enable reviews because I want people to express how my writing makes them feel 😌 God bless

[Dwayne J. Keeves]

I understand.. Thank you for the feed back.Great read.

[HeartBreakHotel]

I love this girl . It's deep 💪🏻💪🏻 I never knew you wrote I like

[J. B.]

I like this work. I look forward to reading more of your stuff.

Also, I am from NYC as well. :)