Can You See

This is for anyone who can see.

Do you know? 

Can you feel? 

What I hide, and conseal,

 Have you felt or do you see,

 Through my wall, my hurt to be,

 Shattered...

 How are you is what I ask,

 Fine they say as they bask,

 In the happy I don't have,

 But how am I? A warm sunny beach,

 You can't see the lies I preach

 Or Can You... 

If you do you must tell me,

 Tell me how much you can see,

 Tell me how i'm not alone,

 While I stand here on my own,

 Broken...

Author's Note

I encourage any feedback.

Reviews

[Tabby Mac]

I love this piece! Very relatable! Others who feel this way know they are not alone. I find many are searching for freedom from self and rarely find it.
I've felt this way in life. Most people don't take the time to see. Their minds are too busy. Or they are hiding their own brokenness to worry about others. It's nice to have someone lend a hand to get us out of the mud. Most walk on by. I will say once I broke free I made it my mission to stop and grab hands!
Great emotional! I enjoyed how you challenged the reader too.
Tabby

[Taz]

Thank you!

[William Liston]

This is one of my favorite themes in poetry and life in general: the fact that we can't truly know what someone else is going through based on the mere glimpses we see. Anyone can fake a smile. Ironically for me, two of the most depressed people I've ever known would smile all the time, so much that you'd think they were truly happy.
I enjoyed the rhythm of the lines as well as the scenario this poem describes. I think it's a thought-provoking write, with the title serving as a simple but effective reflection of the poem's theme. Well done.

- William Liston

[Taz]

Wow, thank you.

[H.N.Seal]

I love the way you create your own style in your writing by your diction. You word things in a different way which really draws the reader in. I will be reading more! :)

[Taz]

Thank you, everything comes out of my mind.

[Peyton Light]

Very emotional. Some of the lines are great, but a couple seem kind of off. Overall, really good :)

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I like this ending , tell me how much you can see,
Tell me how i'm not alone, Just this is very powerful.

[Taz]

Thank you for all your reviews, I try to just write my soul and this poem is what I got

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Yes i realy like it. its very simple and strong

[Taz]

Thank You.

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You wellcome.

[Silver]

Your writing is powerful , you try to express your heart and your soul , you do it well
You just asking for help here

[Taz]

This is true

[Broken Hearts]

Love how it captures how only the outside is visible or is chosen to be seen by others. We live in a world where people refuse to see the pain and truth, but we'll make it through together. Keep writing.

[Taz]

I will thank you.

[Shannon]

In a few ways, this is very universal.. the desire to be truly seen. But the sadness attached also makes it very personal. Lovely progression.

[Taz]

Thank you very much for your kind words but honestly I just made this without any plan.

[H.L. Cerveise]

A very well written poem about feeling how the inner you is invisible to all around you. Others see only our outside and most that is all they want to see. We go through life echoing what others want us to say. Keep writting.

Well Done

[Taz]

Thank you for your feedback.

[Surya]

Anger overcoming pain described in a beautiful way....