Between Rusty Pages

 

 

Behold these melodramatic verses like sweat on sweeties,

Confide forever in feathery ink.

Reveal crimson roses flattered between dusty wings,

Tenderly will it swallow composed tits and bits.

And blustery squalls shall smile in wilderness…

Reviews

[Pooja Chintamani]

Just a drink of words to intake. Beautiful nd super.. I just fall for the wording.

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing use of words and thoughts. I enjoyed this poem. Thank you Tazeen for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[EcstaticEuphoria]

What a delicious piece! I ate up all your words and underlying meanings. Love to discover pieces that aren't exactly as they are at the surface. Keep sharing

[Fahmida Mehreen]

Short, simple and spot on!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

This is such a beautiful write, almost lilting to the ears. I very much enjoyed the flow. One thing though: 'tits and bits' doesn't feel right to me (I would have suggested 'titbits', which is actually the correct term, but it doesn't fit well with the rhythm of this piece) maybe you should try to alter that part a bit ;)
A lovely read for me. Well penned, Tazeen :)

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Dr. Yumna, thank you so much for an insightful and constructive review. I did struggle a little with it. Hopefully, i'll fix an alternative there.
Good-day:)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're welcome :)

[sparkly.ghost]

Wow! This is so exquisitely beautiful! I love the way the syllables of your writing just flow so well... and the way your words just fit together like puzzle pieces. You are such an amazing poetress.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it.

[Sudeep Mishra]

Extravagant beads of words.
I guess sweat on sweeties implies your efforts and the sweet results coming out of it.
White light has seven hidden colors, same as your writing.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Woah! that gives me a wide smile :)
I appreciate readers relating and understanding their own way. Thank you so much Sudeep!

[Najam Us Saher]

I liked how imaginative you were writing about the pages.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Thank you Saher! :)

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome :)

[CMC]

I like the use of near-rhymes in this poem a lot. Good work.

[Tazeen Ahmed]

thank you Chris. I really appreciate it!

[CMC]

You are quite welcome.

[Haneefah]

Such a beguiling piece Tazeen......

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Thanks Haneefah:)