Clock Revised

Revised the old clock poem I wrote hope it flows better now.

Tick-tock, tick-tock

Life’s begun. Breathe in breathe out.

Your senses kick in.

The journey of humanity begins.

 

Tick-tock, tick-tock

Life snakes on.

“You live and you learn,” as they always say.

Knowledge hits you like a speeding car.

You see today and don’t think of tomorrow.

 

Tick-tock, tick-tock

You’ve grown old.

But with age comes great wisdom.

You finally learn how precious life is and it’s over.

 

 

Tick-tock, tick-tock

You’re gone but the clock still ticks on.

Reviews

[Kurayami]

This is a really good poem. I can't find any flaws in it.

~Kurayami

[Tech]

Thank you very much :).