Delicacy

Try the gray pudding
between my ears-
Crushed beneath
The stones for years.

 

I've looked into eyes
Hoping to see

Just a tiny peice
Of me.

 

But here on a spoon
I offer to you

A sample of
That hopeless goo

 

So open wide
And don't be scared,

A madness wasted
Is one not shared.

Reviews

[S. P. Vaporis]

this was diabolicaly sweet to read. loved the last lines as they brought the whole write together. perfection! ~peace~

[R J Askew]

I liked the first four lines of this very much, there is humour in them and a great image there, too. I can't get my head round the last two lines somehow though! The other two poems are bossing my thoughts though, the clams and noir efforts...they seemed very real. Maybe i just need real this afternoon and not abstract!

[Klyn]

A little Merlot with that please! Raw and fabulous!

[Fran Marie]

Very interesting in both in content and form ~matter of fact it makes the reader think and it is well penned ~Great Write! and thanks for sharing~Fran

[Chantal-lise Mirman]

Even though I'm finally over my Zombie period, I love the almost perversely intimate feel of this poem. Offering your very brains in order to finally be able to see yourself in someone else's eyes is several mega-steps up from a business card exchange! The metaphor is reinforced by multi-leveled images and self-deprecatory humorous as to be extremely engaging. This is truly a delicacy of a poem (although perhaps not for the squeamish). Can I have a second helping, please?

[Michael X]

loved this, letting the reader
indulge in creative thought,
metaphorically perfect in my opinion,
expression that causes the reader to
ponder, colorful imagery combined
with detailed emotion, thanks peace, mike

[Shane Patrick]

I like this, only because I am a huge fan of Thomas Harris, It is metaphoric in eating of ones brain.. or maybe it would be devouring a persons soul... it poses questions and makes the reader think, i really liked this one my friend.. :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Interseting poem... I see many things in this... I guess mostly I see someone who feels no one has ever understood them...