Crows and coffin nails

The crows in my head often seek
a good psychotherapist
They often b***h about the weather
The earth too high
The sky too low
And the rain and heavy snowfall is killing them

the crows passing by the window don't really
take pleasure in reading my poems
they say "bitching" is not really poetic
We have seen your father
He had carried his coffin a while
But now he dropped it in the ground
From time to time he flies with us

Reviews

[Molly Garnet]

Dark, humorous, intriguing. Very well written poem, I really liked it. Thank you for sharing it.

[Koibito "Nickie" Kitsuy..]

Nicely done. It reminded me of a friend who has a story that really fitted with the poem. I like the symbolism that is also tied into the poem. To me the crow creates is like memories of the past and the troubled emotions that come with those memories. Then the subconscious being another crow that tries to relieve us of the bad experience in a calming way.

[kublakhan27]

A fair bit of wit but a fair bit of mourning as well...a good reflection of the mix of emotions a crow is capable of evoking...nicely done.

[Ted]

Thank you very much. I am happy you feel it.

[Lesley]

I love the use of language in this! It made me laugh while also retaining a semblance of seriousness. Very witty, dynamic and honest. Good job.

[AmandaN]

I like this. Humorous but slightly melancholy in its darkness.
Thanks

[Leonard Birch]

Beautifully written Ted. I thank you for posting.
Leo

[Hana Saemon]

dark but beautiful. well penned.

[Luke L]

Lovely stuff, very dark, but beautiful writing.

[Ted]

Thank you Luke. This is a poetry I wrote one years ago after the death of my father, so I guess it is dark indeed.

[Luke L]

you're welcome man

[Rita L. Sev]

Fascinating metaphor, great dark yet witty imagery in this poem.

[shallimarRose]

Very thought provoking piece Ted. I just wish the crows here would stop leaving their footprints.. I enjoyed thank you for the rr shallimarRose