A Day

This one is written more like a haiku. It's three lines. Theme is nature/weather and such. I think if translated, it would be a haiku or even close to one.

Gray sky.

Rain hope.

Sunlight morning.

Author's Note

Whadda ya think? I've got the Japanese words for it, but I need to figure out the order and there's at least four different ways to write it stright from English, which I know isn't right. Help would be nice on that part.

Reviews

[Alaska Frost]

Great haiku! Um, I think that to make it a little better, you could try making the lines flow into each other better. I can see how they all relate to each other, but that is just a suggestion. Thanks for sharing! Good luck in my haiku contest! :)
-Alaska Frost