Hidden Message

Just toying with some ideas here, getting my writing groove back.

The fraying words collected
On this misbegotten page
Have the semblance of a secret
Though it peters out with age.

What this single precious message
Had to offer in its day
Was a serenade of lasting love,
A parting of the ways.

A testament of vengeance wrought
In blood to mark its worth,
The final thoughts of suicide
A rolling tale of mirth.

This existence, finally answered
Or hope dashed against the rocks,
Whether joyful, torn or angry
It’s a message now that’s lost,

To the bearer of this secret
Would they ever see reply?
Had their message been diverted
Where now does the answer lie?

For the words placed here are blurry
As its people now are gone,
So a little world collapses
With the secret that was borne.

Reviews

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Your use of language is masterful! Very well done, again. I'm a diehard rhymer too (and received the nasty looks). gone -> borne... could be a better rhyme. It's less powerful of an ending being a less exact rhyme I think. For me this piece hit home in a special way; my childhood sweetheart died a few years ago and there was much left unsaid. No matter how hard I try though I cant seem to find words to express it. These are the best words I've found yet and it doesnt bother me in the least they're someone else's... it's nice to just feel like there is an expression out there. I enjoyed it!