Drunk on your name day

My second piece, please review it - constructively and critically. I'll endeavor to do the same for you.

Drunk on your name day


As the actress came off stage

I said to her

water might be vodka

or wodka as you put it.

wodka might be water

she said.

a blend of the both

would be

nice

but water might be wodka

and

i

don’t know which one i have

Author's Note

what do you think of the subtelty within this poem. Do you feel it is too ambiguous as it is, would you prefer there to be a second section embellishing the story? making it more specific?

I'd love to hear you interpretations of this piece
I know quite well what the story is all about in my head, it is very specific, but i have left it for the reader to mull over and kept it very stark. Perhaps it is far too brief to tell any exact truths but i think the overall feeling is the important part I wished to get across.

Reviews

[See ya]

Okay...
this brought the image of a producer who is struggling with an alcoholic actress who cant even distinct between water and vodka anymore. Every beverage tastes like vodka to her. The Wodka thing is where I became perplexed and took me away from the story as my brain tried to make sense of it but thats the point i think, just an unhinged world.

[TheCuckoo]

I was also wondering whether to add a final line

I said to myself