See You Again

Even though you're millions of miles away
I know that you're always here
When in the night sky I see a glistening star
It whispers to me that you are near

 

On those days when I feel sad and lonely
All I have to do is speak your name
And I will feel your presence in my heart
The act of missing you is no longer a burning flame

 

Because I recall the rainy day that you left
You told me to keep your memory alive
Until the time when we will meet again
That is the hope on which I thrive

 

I hold close the shirt that smells like you
It calms me whenever I'm upset
I listen to the songs we used to sing
And watch your favorite shows on the TV set

 

I think about you every night
It helps me to fall asleep
One beautiful day I'll see your face again
That's a promise to myself I intend to keep

Reviews

[Owlgirl]

Aw, this one is sad yet cute and has heartwrenching emotion in it. You may want to work a little on the amount of syllables per line to help the flow, but it's okay as is. I love your word choices and especially the line " the act if missing you is no longer a burning flame " great job Lydia!

[eeoopig]

Wow nice job - sad - I like it! The emotion in this is great, I loved the line "I listen to the songs we used to sing", it reminds of how I sometimes listen to songs I used to love just to bring back memories of the past. good job

[Schyala]

Love the emotion and syntax! Even diction was great :)

[BLBrown]

This poem is very sad and poignant. As the reader, I can feel the sadness and desperation of losing a loved one. It seems like you are writing about your love, but I'm not sure so you might consider finding a place for another four lines about who this person is to you and about your relationship...how you met...how you fell in love...I think that might make it even sadder and the loss greater.

Just some things to think about So sad. It is a good poem.

[R.A. Youngblood]

Your imagery is beautiful as always! This is very emotional, positive, I like your poetic choice of words and your flow of thoughts! I hope you'll see him. :D
Thanks for sharing..Keep it up :D

[AreeshaJ]

wow, beautiful!

[bunmal]

What a cute poem! :) I felt, though, that the flow of the poem was disrupted in the second stanza. But overall I loved it. Well done.

[Kes]

This is really pretty. I wonder if this is based on imagination or experience? I'm not expecting an answer, I'm just musing. :)
This is a beautiful poem anyway.
Great work - as usual.
K

[just is]

I really enjoyed this write, amazing poetic flow.

[None]

Wow. I only wonder where this loved one went. Well told in convincingly simple language. I feel the heart of the speaker here, watch him go about his life, and cheer for him to have the endurance to keep his promise. Great poem.

[branden]

Wow your really good at writing. Especially for a thirteen year old. I dont mean to belittle your age its just really good. PLease feel free to critique or comment on this short story Ive started writing :)

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/brandensmith38/991968/