A Belated Apology

I take a seat at my weathered writing desk
To pen you the most sincere apology letter
For all the times that I've  made you cry
I deeply hope this will make it better

 

I'm sorry for making you feel so small
I only did it to make myself feel greater
I'm sorry for kicking you when you were down
I'll go into further detail a little later

 

I'm sorry for standing by and watching
When they all ganged up on you
I could have stepped in and helped
But cheering them on is what I would do

 

I'm sorry for not always being there
When you needed a shoulder to cry on
I should have consoled you through the night
Instead I ignored your calls and stayed withdrawn

 

I'm sorry for making empty promises
That I never intended to keep
You loved me with all your heart
But I treated you as something cheap

 

I'm sorry that I'm writing this too late
You'll never recieve this apology
It's all my fault that you're not here
You took your life all because of me

Author's Note

Another really fast and spur of the moment write. I know I could work on the rhyming, but I tried not to focus on that too much. Anyways, tell me what you think!

Reviews

[Aehr]

A very well written poem. good rhyme, good rhythm... the last line sums up the poem really well... well done!

[eeoopig]

Wow, intresting :O took her life. Sad and dark again :) flows well, apart from a few of the rhymes - it had good rhythm. Good job

[words a la carte]

I think once you work out the few rhyming issues this poem has it will flow a lot better. I get the message that you're trying to send but the poem's flow was definitely a little off. Once you work it out though this could easily be a really great piece

[Kes]

I really like this.
You so remind me of me when I was your age (she says, trying not to be condescending!). I'm only 3 years older than you. But it's amazing how people change.
I felt, in a couple of places, that the rhyme was a tiny bit strained, but I know you've acknowledged that, so I won't linger. :)
Great work.
K

[None]

Sorry, Lydia, but I'm not feeling this one. The tone of this one felt somewhat sarcastic, as if the ending would say "you deserved it," but then false blame was taken instead for a suicide!!! I just don't feel like the tone, mood, and arch of this poem are congruent.

Don't mean to be a downer. With some work, I am sure you will make it flow.

[AreeshaJ]

love it! absolutely love it!

[Harley (arbiter)]

Wow. Emotional. Great write

[Owlgirl]

Wow, amazing, fantastic writing!