The World and Your Dreams

Of all the simple things around

The ones I yearn are far-fetched; 

Such the predicament that swells within me

Shattered, scattered and deserted.

The world is big and promising

Though it now stood narrowly dense;

My eyes gape at it

Seeking for the truth.

Hopes and promises

They all crumbled into dust;

Like comets high above

Vanishing into the night.

Life is life

Not the things that turn black to white;

Dreams echo your deepest desire

But, the world is vast, you cannot deny it.

  

Author's Note

I love knowing what would be your thoughts regarding this free form poem. It just flow into my mind like the crystal clear water. A penny for your thoughts, if you don't mind. :)

Reviews

[V]

I really like that one, the truth you provide in here. I can easily relate to your thoughts, especially the first two lines. Nice :)

[TheMalady]

Thanks a lot for reading, and I truly appreciate it. I'm very happy that you like this! :)

[V]

You're welcome. The things I like are of great variation. ;)

[J.A]

Great message here. Especially to anyone who is feeling disappointing or down at the time. The "world is vast" indeed, and sometimes we tend to forget. Thanks for the reminder.

[TheMalady]

Thanks a lot, J.A and you're very welcome. I'm very happy that my poem was very helpful. :)

[maria ( rose)]

“Hope is a waking dream'' Love the style and tone of this poem ..awesome work my friend !!

[TheMalady]

Thanks a lot for reading! Your feedback is greatly appreciated, my friend! :)

[maria ( rose)]

hey anytime ! I'll be back after lunch .......... :D

[TheMalady]

No problem! Enjoy! Though, it's midnight in my place. haha :D

[maria ( rose)]

:D sleep tight

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Interesting work..Great imagination..Yes, the world is a very big place but yet it can be quite small in that what we do in one place effects the whole earth..Keep writing..Sara

[TheMalady]

Thanks a lot for reading, Sara! I'm very happy for the comment! It really gives me inspiration to strive hard! :)

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Keep up the good work..Sara

[-inactive now-]

I can sense the emotions that flowed into this. Good writing comes straight from the writer's thoughts and feelings :) this is the case here.
Though just a few friendly suggestions if I may:
'Far-fetch' should be 'far-fetched'
I reckon you should consider changing the wording of the third and fourth line a little. Something about bubbling waters and molten lava just doesn't quite sound right together.
The rest of it I liked very much:)

[TheMalady]

Thank you very much! I thought as well about the 'far-fetch' to be 'far-fetched'. I will keep this in mind for my future writings. Thanks a lot once more! :)

[-inactive now-]

no worries =)