colors love you most

An attempt to concoct a soup of senses

color loves you most…

the way cocoa loves the rich depth of your eyes,

and mocha loves the cream of your skin.

 

your smile is bright and fresh like lavender in the spring,

your lips move the way maroon and rust and yellow kiss the autumn,

and your touch dazzles the way white sparkles the winter.

Reviews

[justjenn_2u]

I love how the subject manner speaks in similes of the love of another. I believe your purpose in communicating is by utilizing predominant emotion. The poem is structured as if it is a sonnet. You utilize personifications very well throughout the entire poem. The rhythmic quality is slow, such as how true love should be.

[m.s.early]

Thank you sweet Jenn. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Woman compare to hot cocoa. I like it. The nice description create nice vision and I like the ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Mockingbird]

worthy of the Bard himself. it does awaken the senses in my mind's eye.

[m.s.early]

Wow! What a compliment! Thank you so kindly!

[justjenn_2u]

Not a very constructive critique. I was wanting to read more of substance.

[David Scott]

Yes!
I could see her in the colors of my mind.
A "dazzle" of poetic vision.

This was a strong poem!

[B.J]

You created with your writing what you needed to do brilliantly

[m.s.early]

Thank you so much for the kind comment!

[B.J]

Your welcome you did a good job