speak to me in music

i imagined her voice falling like the whole world upon me
and bursting into a thousand pieces.

she wrote to me, “speak to me in music”
and the sound of a thousand singing children
in the temple choir
rang relentlessly in my rattled cage.

i pretended not to notice
but the tempo quickened and the stress beat alternated...
on the one
then syncopated,
like my heart,
i palpitated.

while her eyes in a painting wire me together
the way a man is drawn and bound to the rocks by sirens,
i will be praying incessantly
in the density of my slipping sanity
for the utterance of my name
to be drawn from her lips salaciously

Reviews

[barleygirl]

The best thing about your writing is originality of style & content. I love how it's a blend between a more classic old-fashioned poetic sound (shakespearean, for lack of a better word) with a more modern sounding tempo & message. I like your sophisticated word choices, but in the last stanza "incessantly" and "salaciously" somehow did not feel as congruous as the other complex words you use. Your message starts out in a more conversational way, then toward the end it seems to feel a little less spontaneous. I offer these observations for interest, not to suggest any changes. All in all your writing is very compelling (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Kelly Scheppers]

"for the utterance of my name
to be drawn from her lips salaciously..."

Now I know what butter feels like upon toasted bread. How lovely, indeed.

[Coyote Poetry]

I loved this poem my friend.
"she wrote to me, “speak to me in music”
and the sound of a thousand singing children
in the temple choir
rang relentlessly in my rattled cage. "
The above lines, real life feel. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Amanda Trerotola]

I love how you incorporated dialogue! This is so beautiful.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Yeah yeah....HERE I am again spinning in the essence of it all :P

[Ardra]

i think speaking in music is a universal language..just like love is...
there is no age, cast, creed, distance it travels... just like when our love whispers sweet nothings they are just music to our ears...beautiful creation :)

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I wish that my tones were as beautiful and seductive as this poem. The effect of your poems always leave me spinning...sometimes into Cinderella...sometimes a warrior princess, a bird, a siren,....but always back again to a girl....a girl in love with love.

[Chris]

You've got "It" good...Don't forget to sing softly to her.