Spider Blood

So often you say things

With so little meaning

They mean many things

I hardly can speak with you

Let alone listen

In fear of spidery

Webs on your lips

I don’t know if you mean it

But I’ve been bitten before

And still harbour a scar

From the juice of our bloods

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Very well done! I love the idea & the execution of this message. This situation is very relatable & you described it with originality. The older I get, the more people seem to be like these spiders . . . and I've always hated spiders. The opening was particularly arresting becuz of all the people who keep talking when they have little to say.

[TheUnrulyWriter]

Thank you for the review! It's always nice to hear that people find my work relatable yet still original. I think that's what almost every writer strives to be :)

[BubbleRaps]

An incredibly relatable feeling. Well written.

[TheUnrulyWriter]

Thank you! I'm glad you can relate :)

[Poetic License]

Holy moly. The images that this conjures. You picked the perfect image to pair with the terrors of broken trust, revisiting lost love - I don't think there is a more intrepid, fear invoking, creepy creature to carry these feelings forth. And the power in the image of the splat of spider blood as the "once bitten, twice shy" metaphor would have me most decided thinking five or six times (at least) before ever venturing near those lips or love again.

You absolutely nailed this in subject matter. Your choice of the spider is so powerful, the sticky web on lips hiding intent meaning.

[TheUnrulyWriter]

Thank you for your amazing review!! I'm glad my imagery stood out to you in such a way. Although this poem is not about romance, it is certainly still about lost love. I have suffered through a few abusive friendships and it has left me suspicious of people who try to be close to me, even if they are well-intentioned.

[Poetic License]

As well you should be. I understand that position all too well. It helps also that I am the world's worst arachnophobic!

[TheUnrulyWriter]

Oh man me too... but I'm scared of all bugs (even butterflies haha)!!