You misunderstood me

I told you to be quiet.
So I could sip on your silence.

Not to be buried miles deep
in concrete slabs of it.

I wanted a silence
Like a lake for us to skim
Not one that closed over my head

Like a tomb that won't ever speak

I told you to be quiet.
I didn't tell you to die.

Reviews

[Claude]

This poem is sharp, intimate, and intense. It takes a simple idea—silence—and twists it into something heavy and dangerous, showing how miscommunication or misunderstanding can suffocate. The repetition of “I told you to be quiet” hits hard, and the contrast between peaceful silence and suffocating silence makes the emotional punch land. It’s raw and haunting.

[Brandon Houser]

This starts with a jolt, and ends with another. I loved how everything lands in this piece with the intensity of a dagger. Thank you for sharing this.

[Ken Simm.]

So very, very sad and intense. I cannot say that I liked such an honest pean, but I did love it.

[Chris Shaw]

There is no apology here although a misunderstanding appears to have taken place. A bit of peace and quiet has put paid to a relationship by the sounds if it. The tone comes across as annoyance and anger. I am wondering whether the wound can heal and the relationship can be salvaged. I guess you have to weigh up the positives against the negatives to decide.

Have a great weekend Divya. With every good wish.

Chris

[S€H@J]

I recently lost my grandmother and what Hurts me the most is that more than cheerful memories with her, I often remeber times when I was at clash with her.
Speaking honestly she was a bold woman and didn't fear a debate but now then whenever I think about it I miss her so much.... I just hope I hadn't clashed or debated with her and instead spent better time with her

Of course the wound will heal by time , but the scar of her memories will remain

This piece reminds me of herself and myself and connection tha won't ever be broken between us no wonder how far she is

I really found this piece well LOVE IT
Peace from J&K!!!
(Honestly bcz of terrorism there isn't that much of peace here but nevertheless!)