“Bare Nature of Things”

Like snow, on the twenty-fourth of July,  

rolling in, over the bear essence, ravaging

skinny dipped souls, in and out, quick, leaving bitter,

chilled to the bone; running away.

 

(Taking the heart that dressed this sleeve.)  

 

Cooling lake of fire, blue waves, "Good bye,"

Rocky Mountain heights, passions of love lost

at second glance, watching flakes etched fall   

from frigid iced over hearts.

 

(Abominable and we’re alone)

 

Sometimes life is unpredictable,

like summer snow, we

never had a chance,

and in a cold blink of an eye, she was gone...

 

 

© 2011 T.G. Hopkins III

 

Author's Note

Image:
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Reviews

[Poetic Beauty]

this is a sad tale and reminds me of some one moving away. the summer snow brings in the cold feeling that it leaves in the heart and gives a clear picture to the feelings. the flow was done wonderfully and the imagery fits this sad tale of losing someone.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

she was unlike anything or anyone he has ever known. She took his heart in a flash and was gone.....Excellent Tommy.

[Brianna Brie]

Great write! It offers a fresh new approach to love and life.

[FJ Davis]

The vivid imagery and smart phrasing combine to make this an interesting read--and an excellent poem.

[Aidz]

Kewl write, nice imagry although stretched for someone not in the US

It is winter in July here

[Lilly Negoi]

lots of feelings deriving from this poem Tommy - indeed sometimes we are caught unprepared, like a summer by the snow...

[Layla J Omorose]

This is an interesting poem and I liked it very much. Your use of imagry to show emtion is very good here and I enjoyed reading the poem. Well done.

[Robin]

emotion that thunders from that stormy sky , its rumble still felt ...

another great write , Tommy

[Jūdan FyreHeart]

This is beautiful =D
The brief moment of passion and heightened emotions before the crushing facts that it was over.