Words

A poem about how much words really mean.

I lay my heart out here before you,

I place it on this glowing screen,

So that you may come to see me

In a way so few have seen.

The words that swirled inside my head,

Just begging to pour out,

Now lie down here before your eyes,

My soul, my greatest gift.

 

 

 

Author's Note

Eww...the last line doesn't feel right.
But I'm reasonably pleased with the rest ^^
EDIT: I changed the last line a little. Please tell me what you think!

Reviews

[Listener]

Yeah it was really nice until the last line blocked the flow.. like a clogged artery o-o;

[Tina Kline]

Over all, this is a beautiful poem about the meaning of words,
you got it down well, as for the last line, it doesn't flow perfect
but it is a very good ending to the poem so I think that makes it
work.

[(Super) Heroes Never Di..]

Yeah, I agree. I thought it was wonderful, and the last line is just wondeful!!! Keep it up.

[Skelasoldier]

I liked it, keep up the good work