Fallen

I'm not sure if this is a poem or a story, but I know where I got my inspiration. One source was "The Sight", by David Clement-Davies.

Dark beauty of a thousand worlds,

In your heart and music bright.

Fogged over by the mists of time,

And fantasies in the mind.

 

All is lost.

The beauty fell.

Take this withered petal, and go.

Oblivion awaits

Below the stone castle of ruined souls.

 

But only once you hit the dust

Shall this world learn of true monsters.

Author's Note

This was fun to write. ^^
I would appreciate any reviews, even nasty mean ones.
I'm prepared to edit this particular piece most cruely, anyway. :)

Reviews

[Dillon Cotter]

You have a lot of imagery in here. Very enjoyable!!

-Will

[AngelEyes15]

I thought this poem was well thought out i really liked it :)

[LostInThought ♥]

this poem was very vivid, a great start to something be it a start to a story, or a better poem. Great start! Would you reveiw some of my work? I would appreciate it! Anyway good job! I am interested to see what you come up with

[Lexi =]]

Excellent Poem very imaginative and very descriptive. I love this line
" Dark Beauty of a thousand world"
Great line to me! Good Job
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