You Are My Daughter

My Daughter

 

 

 

 

You are of me every filament

You are everything I will never be

You have never let me down and

     have always lifted me up higher

You are strong in your spirit of life

     but tangibly not as most are.

I am of you every filament

I am everything you will never be

I have never wanted to let you down

     but the day will come when I do

I am not as strong as you in spirit

     but tangibly I am more than most.

I am determined to see to it that I

     do not lose you

You are determined to see to it that you

     will not give up

I am the voice of reason and logic

You are the voice of hope and faith.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is one of the most beautifully-stated messages I've read about a father-daughter relationship. Here's what makes your tribute especially appealing: You do not place yourself above your daughter, or she above you. I love the way you present each of your strengths, yet without any hidden tones of comparison or judgment. Your message uplifts you BOTH in separate & unique ways, this being culminated in the last 2 lines which are awesome. Any daughter would be totally blessed to have such a father.

[Robert]

Tis is a very nice and thoughtful review. I really appreciate this.

[MsJewel]

Your words are powerful and filled with emotion. I really love the line
I have never wanted to let you down
but the day will come when I do
such honesty here - after all we are only human.
A beautiful poem, well written and a delight to read.
:) Julie

[Robert]

Oops, I feel so bad as I always write a reply and I saw I missed this one. Thank you so much Jewel for the review and the kind words, they mean so much.

[wordman]

a beautiful write robert,sounds like a tribute

[Robert]

Thank you wordsman I appreciate the review.

[wordman]

you are welcome robert

[Emily B]

I like the way you control the way the words flow with space and capital letters. Too much punctuation can sometimes be a distraction. The voice is strong. Choice of words and structure both lend to the strength of the message.

[Robert]

Thank you Emily, I appreciate your encouraging words. By the way my Daughters name is Emilie.

[Emily B]

I am the 4th generation in my family :) my daughter is the fifth

[Robert]

That's nice.

[dan]

Robert, This is a very classy piece. I love how the shoe goes on to the other foot in the second stanza, then the third stanza acts as your determined mission statement. Very nicely done, your decision to use NO punctuation was a sound one, the flow of the entire piece is uninterrupted and complete. take care...dan

[Robert]

Yes Dan I took your suggestions on the punctuation. I like not using punctuation better, I know that its needed at times. Thanks for your kind words on the review.

[Mitali Shah]

wow Robert, interesting and marks your relationship towards That power being a real human along your each step. Don't let the faith and hope ever get diminishing even when you feel too is the message which I actually needed now. :) thanks for sharing

[Robert]

Thank you Mitali, I appreciate your kind words. I am glad this poem helped you in any way.

[Mitali Shah]

Robert loved these lines-
You are of me every filament
I am of you every filament
read moreRobert loved these lines-
You are of me every filament
I am of you every filament
I am the voice of reason and logic
You are the voice of hope and faith.

[Robert]

Thank you Mitali

[theshygirl]

this is a wonderful poem , really enjoyed it , easy to read , but still so much impact
well done robert !

[Robert]

Thank you, I am glad that you enjoyed the piece.

[ANTO]

'filament' is such a wonderful word Robert, class choice.

The 'One' will possess all the things we lack and thus when union is joined a new infinitely better 'One' is made from the two. Now just have to find them.

Beautiful writing Robert.

[Robert]

Thank you ANTO I appreciate your words.

[Nadia B.]

This is a fantastic poem on faith and reason!!! I like how you separate what faith and reason is with your use of I am and You are! What is also interesting is that the fact you paired I am with reason and logic tells me your point of view...from my background I would have paired I am with hope and faith. Yet I do have one question as to the lines "You are everything I will never be" and "I am everything you will never be," for faith and reason do share a similar core...they are not forces that work against each other but rather with each other. Faith provides one with the capacity to believe without seeing whilst reason requires one to see and then believe. Granted you are right they will never be each other, but for the gullible and hardheaded both are needed to keep the eyes open. For if one only has faith and no reason they become lost and if one only has reason and no faith one often doubts. However, when a person has both, the heavens and the world opens up to them. ...this is my new favorite poem, thanks for writing!

[Robert]

Thank you Nadia for this review I am glad that you enjoyed this poem. In regards with your question, "you are everything I will never be" and I am everything you will never be". This is because we are two separate people. So as the other will never be able to accomplish or be what the other cannot. I believe both have reason, logic, hop, and faith, however each have the more prominent trait than the other. I am glad this is your new favorite poem. You really read into each poem, which I very much like and ask such deep questions. You are a poet for sure. I think this line you wrote explains a lot in the poem. "For if one only has faith and no reason they become lost and if one only has reason and no faith one often doubts." Maybe we are always looking to have both.

[Nadia B.]

Thank you for answering my question and sharing your insights with me, I agree that in life we are always trying to find a balance between the two, really lovely sharing poetry together!

[andrew mitchell]

a great piece Robert all the elements entwined perfectly

[Robert]

Thank you Robert.

[B]

I love this piece
Personifying love and hope and faith

Very righteous and idealistic in a way

I love it

[Robert]

Thank you Nisreenaa.