Flying Down

 

Falling up, eyes clenched open,

feverish chills wrack my body.

I hit the clouds with soft bumps,

and arms spread wide,

I fly toward the earth.

 

Author's Note

Does this work?

Reviews

[Helena]

This was a nice simple but effective write. Well done! ~ Helena

[Kimberly Smith]

love it all the way

[megaluv92]

that was very nicely written.

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Well written

[jay geenen]

Yes it does. Parachuting I assume? I like the short little works, they are great for a change. Jay

[Eagle Cruagh]

Here is something for you to contemplate.

It is a nice little poem.

If there were a lot of corrections to be made, if
I were to point out flaws in your writing I would
write you a personal message and try to delicately
approach the subject.

Your writing is flawless.

You will receive 100 % from me.

------ Eagle Cruagh