Sugar to my Tea

Another love poem :)

You’re the apple to my pie,

Because I know you wouldn’t lie.

You’re the sugar to my tea,

Because I know we’ll be free.

 

I know we’ll never depart,

Since you’re the love to my heart.

What should I compare thee to?

I see nothing good enough that’s true.

 

If I lost you I’d cry a pool of tears,

Because it’s the worst of my fears.

If we should die old together,

I wish to lie with you as a treasure.

 

Now you know how I feel,

Do you take me for real?

Reviews

[Allan Eddings]

The opening line reminded me of a song by Edward Sharpe and the Magnetic Zeros, called 'Home'. It had that same comely and 'sugar and spice and all things nice' sort of tenor to it, which I enjoyed immensely.

Again you are really blossoming as a poet, unfettered now your writing and how resplendent a thing to read and witness! I must bow.

The final stanza in this piece is simply superb, it made me smile. This is something that really should be set to music.

A.E.

[SheActsLikeSummer]

I enjoyed this. Well done. My favourite rhyme thing was 'If I lost you I'd cry a pool of tears / Because it's the worst of my fears.' Keep it up. :)

[Luciole]

This is absolutely adorable ^-^ A very sweet poem; I loved your comparisons and what not. Great job!

[Maan]

If we should die old together,
I wish to lie with you as a treasure.

Love this part, else whole poem is very nicely written. May be a couple of more lines of sort will beautify it more. Any ways nice work.

[Arte]

This is a beautiful poem, I love it :).