Black Moths

Black Moths
with torn wings
like tracery
like curtains rotting away - Death waits
eager and hungry
destroy and kill
kill and destroy
why am I so sick? - I watch her die
I cry - night and day
year by year
as rot eats away at me
my grave waits - not so patiently - but eager
I sigh - tired - she is tired too
Tattered wings flake away
age comes and goes then comes again
is this a trick? - Sick Immortality?
Shadows linger long and twisted
like a hot afternoon that rejects evening
waiting - waiting - always waiting
Death lingers with a twisted metallic grin
where is the peace? - where is my health
I don't know, she says
and so, too tired to go on
old beyond comprehension
we lie down to die - forgetting - we can't die

Reviews

[R J Askew]

This is brilliant. You boss this genre. The images you conjure up are rich and vigorous. We can sense the way the voice in the poem is trapped in a between place. I esp like the top four lines, and 'age comes and goes then comes again'. The sense of weariness and despair is arch. The best line for me though is 'like a hot afternoon that rejects evening.' It's just shows how everything is all screwed up. As does the notion of 'sick immortality.' Normally immortality is thought to be a positive thing, but if there is sickness it becomes the very opposite. The last line is a great one also. The idea that even the release of death is not to be had is strong because mostly most people don't want death.

[Tina Kline]

Thanks very much!

[Black Cat Fever]

Chilling and impressive work. Darkly beautiful.

[Tina Kline]

Thanks Fur Person!

[Wolf's Dark Song]

A very dark an despairing poem, gloomy, chilling and full of pain and unhappiness.
Yet beautiful it some way. I enjoyed reading this.

[Tina Kline]

Thanks.......

[Coyote Song]

A brilliant pem. Drk and seductive. The pull to death i overwhelming despite the terror one would feeling. Like a drug a person surrenders. Impressive poem.

[Tina Kline]

Thank you thank you!

[Coyote Song]

:) ....................................

[Star Wolf]

Very beautiful and deeply chilling. I was captivated by the dark tale in this very well created poem.

[Tina Kline]

Thank you thank you.

[Star Wolf]

You're welcome.