Serpent's Kiss

It creeps within like so many dark inky vines
slowly coiling and restricting
snakes with slitted red eyes
staring at me - darkly
I hear them hissing - night and day
I hear their fanged jaws snapping
over and over again - a haunting nightmare
The serpentine's poison seeps into me - deeply
toxins in my heart and soul
my vision grows cloudy until I cannot see
my lungs fade into nothingness until I cannot breathe
I am trapped in a nightmare - I cry out
but I have no voice - no air in my non-existent lungs
help! help! The serpent laughs
It stole me - it owns me
I am alone - I am alone now forever
What am I? - Why did no one care?


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Reviews

[Damien Thibodeaux]

The forgotten ones. Alone. It seems everyone is against you or has fogotten you. Nobody cares enough to save you. That's my reader's interpretation anyway. I personal write, strong emotionally. "The sepentine's poison seeps into me - deeply" my favorite line.

[Tina Kline]

Thanks very much!

[Coyote Song]

Chilling. There is like this evil transformation that is happening in this.
Very well written, it really pulls the reader into the horror that is happening.

[Tina Kline]

Thanks very much.

[Star Wolf]

A very powerful and chilling poem.
It casts out a dark spell. So well written.

[Tina Kline]

Thanks, my friend.

[R J Askew]

Strong stuff. You capture what many must feel in the grip of terrible anxieties and stresses, feelings of powerlessness and solitude. I esp like, 'My vision grows cloudy .. My lungs fade .. ' The words capture physical feelings. The strongest line for me is, 'But I have no voice'. Excellent write.

[Tina Kline]

Thanks very very much.

[Black Cat Fever]

A very sinister and hair raising poem.
Well done!
I enjoyed this dark read.

[Tina Kline]

Thaks BCF.

[Sheila Kline]

The serpent is wily and lures the unsuspecting into its jaws.....very gripping description of the lure and power of the viper of evil!!

[Tina Kline]

Thank you!