Madness

darkness rides high
building heaving clouds
streaks of lightning
black spots
               moving closer
                         and closer
distant screaming
               shimmering
                       cutting the fabric of reality
death rides a pale horse
hooves thundering
                     galloping across the sky
                                  hell has arrived
                     red glowing eyes
                                   soulless
                          mocking the suicides
                               never to realize
                    from madness
                                there is no where to hide

Reviews

[R J Askew]

Strong stuff. The black spots are ominous, esp as they are moving closer. Very active. I can also hear the screaming 'cutting the fabric of reality'. Very strong that. The pale horse and the red eyes complete the trio of colours that often represent death, purity and blood. The notion of their being no escape from madness, perhaps even after death is terrifying.

[Tina Kline]

Thank you so very much.

[Jeannette Lunete]

The psychedelic pattern that I personally enjoy is wonderfully formed in this poem.Great writing style. Keep it up.

[Tina Kline]

Thanks very much.

[K.N. Thorn]

What a fantastic poem. It's vivid and alluring. I really enjoyed your word usage and metaphors, 'death rides a pale horse, hooves thundering' is very good. The structure of your poem is beautiful as well. :)

[Tina Kline]

Thanks very much.

[Star Wolf]

The terror quickly draws near even if it is only in one's mind. Still , it is a haunting hungry predator, one meant to destroy. It and does destroy. Well crafted and laid out poem. Love the unique layout. Over all, an outstanding horror poem.

[Tina Kline]

Thank you!!!

[Black Cat Fever]

Powerful! The pain and horror made all my hair stand on end. Meowsome horror poem.
Superb craftsmanship with this writing.

[Tina Kline]

Thank you BCF.

[Eric Cox]

Cool chill and imagery to this cool poem. Excellent work!

[Tina Kline]

Thanks very much. I sure appreciate it.

[Eric Cox]

You're welcome :)

[Wolf's Dark Song]

A very dark and chilling poem. Spooky horror.
I enjoyed the way you laid it out. It's different.

[Tina Kline]

Thanks very much.

[Sean M. Addams]

LOVE THE DETAIL IN THIS.. VERY COOL AND CREEPY ..GREAT JOB ON THIS

[Tina Kline]

Thanks very much. I appreciate it.

[Coyote Song]

A very dark and frighting poem. Very shiver producing. The dark imagery is overwhelming.
Outstanding horror poem. Impressive work.

[Tina Kline]

Thanks, I do appreciate...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you write darkness so well...as in the Stones song "the smell of death the smell of suicide...all these things we cannot hide---undercover of the night"
i feel i have seen that pale horse---and smelled suicide...oh wait, i have.

i relate to this.

[Tina Kline]

Thanks, I do appreciate...!