Wolf Pack

Rising - Sometime past twilight
Aurora borealis burning the skies bright
Snowflakes drift and fall to the earth
This is the meaning of my birth

I race across the arctic wasteland
The embrace of iciness I understand
The velvety blackness of the sky above
The Pack about me - Each other we love

We chase the one snowy apex we can find
We sing for eternity - We sing for all time
The stars shimmer - Seeming to come alive
Without incantations for this magic we do strive

The arctic holds us - Keeps us existing
The next pinnacle keeps us exploring
The great vast whiteness laid out before our eyes
More adventures - More experiences - More we realize

The next valley- The next mountain - The next snow wave
We rise each dusk -Eager - We are brave
Within the Pack's fierce protection we are strong
In each others tender loving we do belong

Reviews

[lawrence bear]

i love the feel of this poem, makes me feel like i am in the pack myself. and i love the picture you used, i can almost hear the wolves howl now, maybe if i opeb my door, just a crack they might race in and have bear meat haha bad joke i know, but you have written a wonderful tale.

[r]

I absolutely LOVE wolves, so that made me love this even more. Plus the imagery is so amazing, I can picture it perfectly. The way it is written makes me feel as if I am actually the wolf. It's amazing to be able to be pulled into anything like that, especially a poem. Love it.

[Wolf's Dark Song]

Very vivid and has such a happy tone to it. I enjoyed reading this wolf poem.

[Black Cat Fever]

A very vivid and descriptive wolf tale with a positive feel to it. I enjoyed reading this one a lot. Very wild and beautiful.

[Star Wolf]

Awesome and brilliant wolf poem. I love wolves and this one is outstanding. I love the whole feel of the wolf in their world.

[Rossen]

I spent twelve years with a malamute wolf mix, Smokey`
So all of your wolfs have a special place with me.
Good job, you have done justice to the lupus~

"In each others tender loving we do belong" sweet finish!

[Chris38]

Reading this made me feel like I was running with a wolf pack. You seem to have a thing about wolves. Brilliant.

[jessicamarie19]

I am a sucker for dashes! I love the feel they give to a piece of writing. I believe they are more intentional, more modern, and more stylish than commas... but that's just the grammar geek in me coming out :)

I find a stumble between existing/exploring, only because you have adhered so closely to the rhyme scheme in the rest of the piece. I would encourage you to play with those lines. While I never want to support sacrificing meaning for rhyme, I think you could make a more powerful effect with your same idea by retaining your rhyme here. Enlisting, persisting, resisting, twisting, insisting, and coexisting are just a few to give you ideas.

[Sean M. Addams]

awesome job on this ... detail in this is impressive and I like the story like feel to this great job..

[Ladysue]

This has a very warm close knit feel to it...the images are beautiful...that first stanza is highly lyrical too...wonderful writing...