My paradise

I'm looking for a land

A land full of light

One I will call

My perfect paradise

Where the sea glides

On the sand with a golden hue

and when you look up

the sky is bright and blue

Where the only songs

are the calls of the birds

and even the smallest sound

never goes unheard.

So I lay in the ocean 

Hoping to die

and wash up on the shores

of my perfect paradise 

Author's Note

I hope you like it! :)

Reviews

[Awakened Rose]

Very beautiful piece. Your words flow like the ocean you speak of..

[WordlessFacade]

Thank you :) I'm glad you liked it!

[Aethereal]

Ah, the vast Karmic Ocean eternally washes the evolved phenomenon of Consciousness upon the paradisiacal shores of Serendipity. Consciousness is One composed of different points-of-view flowing from sources to sinks that trigger the illusion of change. Every point-of-view is a gem within a treasure trove.

[WordlessFacade]

Thank you Aethereal! :)

[1Disawsum]

This is a really great piece of writing, extraordinary, in fact. I love the peace and serenity this poem is mainly about, but then it hints at the sadness of life not working out as planned, or as you'd like it to be. I love the mixture, created with beautiful words. Keep it up!

[WordlessFacade]

Thanks! I really appreciate it! :D

[Wolfwind]

Hmmm... Well if the sand doesn't have to be gold and the sea might be a bit cold... I know just the place! =D
Yet... I don't think people might take to kindly for bodies to start washing up there... So perhaps just finding the quiet and peaceful paradise while alive will work best!

That being said... I like the flow of the ink, it's got a dreamy sway to it that alows for the reader to at once be pulled in, but at the same time be lulled into both the calms and chaos of life that the piece hints at.

Nicely woven!
Aaron - Wolfwind

[WordlessFacade]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it! =)